Jack In The Box

Jack In The Box

My names Corey not Jack,
So why am I trapped in this box?
It feels like the clocks have stopped,
And im locked in this hell,
Imprisoned in this cell,
No matter how loud I yell,
I will never get saved,
Still being enslaved,
Defenceless and trapped,
Senseless and strapped,
Unable to adapt,
To this everyday strain,
To this everyday pain,
To this everyday drain,
My life’s starting to decay,
I wish I was a Bird Of Prey,
So I could just fly away,
Everyday I pray,
But I never get assistance,
Helps keeping its distance,
Whats the point in existence,
When you got next to none resistance?
No there’s no point,
All I seem to do in life is disappoint,
Which is making me frustrated and deflated,
God im asking you why am I so hated?
I’m irritated,
I want to get out of this pit,
Its driving me insane,
I want to commit self harm,
I’ve sounded the alarm,
Someone come before I slice below my palm,
With a blade,
This is not a masquerade,
God I feel betrayed,
With this life you have gave me and displayed,
I’m depressed and afraid,
But I know suicide is not the way,
It would be ungrateful to take my life away,
So please just say,
That you are giving back my soul,
Giving back control,
And from now on my life wont be bad at all,
That’s all I desire and require,
As soon as you give that back,
My life will be back on track,
That’s all I ask,
So God please give me the keys,
To free me from this disease,
My life’s tough and rough,
So God please ive suffered enough…..

By Corey Booth 23/11/11

17 comments on “Jack In The Box

  1. Corey,

    You are far too young to be so self-defeatist…! Point number one. You also have much latent talent that you are just beginning to express… let it flow, but have the discipline to edit your work, or at the very least peruse constructive guidance:

    Rhyming poetry is the hardest form there is to do ‘right’.
    Take this line for example…

    …do you know what, as I’ve gone back and reread it, I’d LOVE to hear a youtube of this, it’s not meant to be read, it’s meant to be EXPRESSED…!

    Poetry can express so much, and as much as you are hurting, you can reach out and help others that are in much, much more dire need than you are, and help them.

    I’m here, if you need me. Don’t despair.

    • clownponders says:

      Thanks for the comment 🙂 As for editing my work I only do that on my serious poems, this was a freestyle where I just wrote what came into my head right away and kept rhyming from that without going back and changing anything 🙂 I’m also not suicidal or depressed, I have been depressed in the past but defiantly not suicidal, in this piece I wanted it to be a dark rhyme so I got into that mentality before the rhyming began.
      I’m also confused did you ask for me to do a youtube version or was that an example or something? Haha.
      Thank you very much for the comment, its nice to have someone take some time to give advise on my work 🙂

  2. Persephone says:

    Wow, I love the flow of this poem. It’s so speedy and “crazy”, like how I imagine those thoughts would be in your head. Very good job!

    • clownponders says:

      Thank you very much 🙂 I like doing fast flowing poems, just write down what comes into my head, I’m not really suicidal though!

  3. jadedheart says:

    So strongly tragic, I have felt this way many times before.

    • clownponders says:

      I’m glad you could relate to this, I hope your feeling better now and your happy with your life 🙂 Thanks for commenting it means a lot 🙂

  4. jadedheart says:

    My life is always up and down. I enjoyed this piece very much, very dark but I’m glad to see that you are not truly feeling that much despair. I often write words that are much darker than I may actually be feeling. Keep up the great writing. 🙂

    • clownponders says:

      I’m very happy that you enjoyed it 🙂 Yes I’m the same, if I’m feeling down ill make a really dark rhyme even if my problem is not that bad 🙂 I will and I look forward to following your blog 🙂

  5. Very honest and thank you for your courage to share it, because there are many people who can relate yet, too many are afraid of exposing it I think. I am grateful for your comment section as well which shows this is not where your thoughts are still trapped. In my opinion, this is how you can best help people with your writing if that is one of your goals ~ write a dark poem to show how you can relate, but then write something in contrast to show what life can be like on the other side. I’m a poet as well and it’s a balance I struggle to find in my own writings (jessiejeanine.com) Keep up the great work friend!

    • clownponders says:

      That is defiantly one of my aims to write poems people can relate to! I was thinking about writing one about life getting better tomorrow but I was not to sure but since you have mentioned it I shall now 🙂 I will keep up the work and I’m really looking forward to searching through your blog 🙂

  6. randomrose says:

    Thank you for following me. I have been reading your poetry. I like the way you express the dark side of life.It troubled me at first but I am realizing you have a great talent for putting into your poetry that wonderful deepness that many don’t want to know about. Congratulations and keep up the good work. I also like your free writing.

    • clownponders says:

      Thank you for the feedback im glad you enjoyed my work 🙂
      Some of the darkness i write about is something alot of people can relate too thats why i do alot of darker poems.
      I look forward to seeing more from your blog too.

  7. Tough and gritty. This poem hits ‘pay dirt’ with me because it’s a ‘workout’ with words as well as emotions. That’s what it’s all about. Great stuff!

  8. elmediat says:

    Nice staccato. well done !

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